Sunday, September 2, 2007

Just Hold On

He held her in his arms, gently wiping the raindrops off her face. The more he thought, he began to realize that the rain was mixed in with his steady stream of tears. The sound of the rain and her raspy breathing was all he could hear.

Her eyes opened, glanced at her car, which laid upside down, half mutilated, then they turned to him – Peter.

“Peter, what happened?” Olivia asked. He could tell she was fading away. Instead of telling her about how he fell asleep, leaving her along at the wheel. And he didn’t tell her that she fell asleep because of the lack of company. He didn’t tell her that they crashed, and were sitting in the median, drenched in rain. Instead he told her this;

“I loved you. That’s what happened.”

“I love you too.” She smiled. He smiled. Their smiles seemed to last forever, but as always, forever is never long enough.

Her face twisted with pain, and she cried out; “Peter help!”

He just held Olivia tighter and tighter for there was nothing he could do. She let out a sigh. Her eyes froze. She was dead.

He kissed her, and allowed himself to give up. He had ignored his pain so she wouldn’t have had to watch him die. He said a prayer, and laid back. He did not bother to close his eyes. He wanted to belike her – he wanted it to be fair.

He positioned himself as comfortably as possible, and let the pain slowly take over him, causing his death.

8 comments:

Scarlett Faust said...

this is great. it's really emotional. and even though it's short, it has enough detail to make it heart wrenching. is there any significance in your choice of names?

Anonymous said...

peter & olivia? why....do u know an olivia?

Scarlett Faust said...

i know peter and olivia. peter brumm. olivia farley. from swimming. i also know an olivia pan... but i doubt chris does...

Anonymous said...

this is really good and I think it can relate to alot of people!!

Scarlett Faust said...

i showed this to megan d and morgan y and they were like woah. its depressing. i was like...um...i dont think thats the point... haha

its beautiful. thats the point. and if its not, dont tell me.

Sarah said...

OMG! i loved it, it was beautiful!! great job!

Anonymous said...

That was ah-mazing! Great job!!

Anonymous said...

chris this is great! you know that i like most of your writing but this i really loved! its so emotional yet not depressing like some of your stuff. :) its really good!! :)